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He smiles,
she laughs.
Feeling each other,
They touch.
Lost in embrace,
They try and remember,
What is it that’s so hard to forget?
If she could only shut it out,
As he tries to kill it off,
Forget conscience,
In the safety of others’ arms,
They smell.
Oblivious to the world,
She kisses the other,
on the neck he feels.
Shivers,
Feels his pulse rising, he.
Takes her into his arms,
Pinned to be one,
They hear, the heartbeat of the other.
The night was reaching its climax,
Or was it the day?
She couldn’t care less.
The moment belonged to her,
And no one else.
He was ecstatic,
No one could hold down what was his to own.
Treading along the wanderlust,
Bodies against bodies,
Lips against limbs,
On the taste, they feast.
Slept peacefully after making love,
Molding it, perfecting it to their wants.
She wakes up,
Tries to feel him by her side.
He sits there,
Smelling her body,
Listening her breath,
Stroking tenderly on the soft breasts,
Tasting the morning air, bringing promises and fears alike.
Was there a sense that something was amiss?
As they stood up,
Hand in hand,
Took their walking sticks.
For all he could sense, he couldn’t see how beautiful she looked.
For all the feelings her heart could take, neither could she..
very nice 🙂 mahol romantic bana dia ,kal to ladki pata te hain:D
dude !
exotic romance can be felt in these words. awesome. (Y)
thanks Pro. 😀
After reading it, I m *high* 🙂
then its just. after penning it down, i was.! 😀
Gazab! Salute.
i’m honored, brother! 😀
One correction: Ecstatic hoga instead of eccastic
shit. yeah, my bad. Thanks.
Daaku .. aise achanak se romantic :O
Smarty! Saale not romantic. Myraid of feelings, but sirf romantic. No no. {: 😛
Great job!
Thanks Nikhil. 🙂
For all I can say, Love is blind. 🙂
It needs a deeper higher level of indulgence to appreciate the quintessence of true love. Beautiful piece with beautiful description of two mortals making love, with thoughts so wild and love so deep.
Well. We are all obsessed with the idea of love, falling in love at the first sight; and it was a challenge being immune to the essential fragility of vision and ponder over it.
Thanks. Is this Anonymous by any chance the kid currently studying in Delhi? {:
No. We don’t know each other. I just happened to come across this piece.
Oh, my bad then.
Thanks for the feedback. I was pretty unsure of doing justice to the idea of the poem myself. 🙂
Haha. Seriously. Tongue in cheek? 😉
This is great! Mazza aa gaya padhke!
Thanks Nirmal. Mujhe mazza aaya tha likhke. 😉 😀
Deep indeed. Every bit of feelings is covered. Good work dude 🙂
Dhanyavaad Gera bhai. 🙂
You absolutely did justice to the idea.
Thanks. 🙂
Touching..it reminded me of one English chapter in class 12 when two blind people just couldn’t express their love to each other..i felt so bad about it that time..but you made it up.. 🙂
Wow. This is one of the best acknowledgements one can hope for. Thanks. 🙂
My brother. This is seriously good. i dont comment otherwise. love you.
much much much much more vibhor this time. i can read this a hundred times over for what it stands for. sexy bro.
Aniket! Thanks a lot brother for such a lovely comment, I’m honored. 🙂
And yeah. This is the first time you’ve said anything on anything I’ve written! 😛
Dude .. respect !!! Surprised that only one publisher has appreciated your work so far …
Dude .. respect !!! Surprised that only one publisher has appreciated your work so far …
Thanks brother. Means a lot. 🙂
Amazing!